I want to write words that move
like a bass line smoothes out
a slow song.
I want this thing
to beat your bones
like it was a fucking kick drum.
Like buh-dum
dum
dum.
Can you feel it bumping yet?
Like a song that you loved
but forgot about
until just now.
These words are fucking music,
but they only make sounds
in your head.
Can you hear it?
LOU RASMUS
big book guy
Music
41 responses to “Music”
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…printed is the operative word…I don’t see WordPress as printing….
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Difference of opinion is a wonderful thing. Showing one’s sophomoric (half) ass product and excusing it as draft, anywhere in public, is inexcusable. Save for avant garde local or collegiate theater, and then it’s sort of an expectation. Hit me with your best shot, you know? Or save your ammunition.
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LOL!
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Comments like yours get under my skin and motivate me to write more…not necessarily better…but more. So keep commenting. The fact that you’re directing your energy in my direction is a positive thing. Thanks. (Chances are I’ll never post the 2nd/3rd draft to WP anyway. This is a sophomoric venue that I use as my learning tool. Comments from readers, like yourself…only help move the story forward. So thanks for the energy…seriously.
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Thanks.
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i think so
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I hear you Lou
But you’ve gotta do
The baselines from your head
It has to be neat
But not a repeat
Of something that you’ve read
Don’t worry of the grammar
Don’t worry of the tense
Disengage your ego
Forget the audience
Make sure it’s authentic
Make sure that it’s true
Make sure that you feel it
MAKE SURE IT IS YOU.
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good point. good comment
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Uh…This would be a song about desire to write a song? I’ve played synthesizer, for real, since 1973. I’ve stepped inside my mind and heard shit that’s acid on crack reversed and immersed in a 3D orb and seen music fly out of a piano harp as colorful geometry. So my question is are we reading the desire to write like that feels? The trick to the kick is 60 cycles or down where you can count them, gated, with some smack on the attack and the fading luminosity ooooooommmm. Here’s one. Did you know that churches long ago used the 32 foot or longer oragn pipes to rattle the room and instill fear in parishoners? That a standing subharmonic can cause your bowels to let go and stop your heart? If you desire to write like that? Strong enough to stop people’s hearts and make them shit where they stand? That, my man, is a kick ass desire and may you succeed! No more candy ass.
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haha i was reaching for something like that
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thank you very much
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LOU RASMUS 
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