I want to write words that move
like a bass line smoothes out
a slow song.
I want this thing
to beat your bones
like it was a fucking kick drum.
Like buh-dum
dum
dum.
Can you feel it bumping yet?
Like a song that you loved
but forgot about
until just now.
These words are fucking music,
but they only make sounds
in your head.
Can you hear it?
LOU RASMUS
big book guy
LOU RASMUS 
41 responses to “Music”
I hear it, and I feel it.
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right on. thanks for listening
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You remember any old songs that you used to hate, but when it comes on you think, hey, that’s pretty coool?
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This wasn’t one of them. Lol
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nailed that punchline
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Yes. Echos of the past
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very nice
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Fuck yes I hear it!
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great Walt. happy you do
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Writing and music much in common.
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Music, unless recorded, is more forgiving. Drop a performance clam and it’s gone, take your beating from the band and move on. Or call it Jazz. Typos and poor phrases printed are a shame forever…
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…printed is the operative word…I don’t see WordPress as printing….
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Difference of opinion is a wonderful thing. Showing one’s sophomoric (half) ass product and excusing it as draft, anywhere in public, is inexcusable. Save for avant garde local or collegiate theater, and then it’s sort of an expectation. Hit me with your best shot, you know? Or save your ammunition.
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LOL!
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Comments like yours get under my skin and motivate me to write more…not necessarily better…but more. So keep commenting. The fact that you’re directing your energy in my direction is a positive thing. Thanks. (Chances are I’ll never post the 2nd/3rd draft to WP anyway. This is a sophomoric venue that I use as my learning tool. Comments from readers, like yourself…only help move the story forward. So thanks for the energy…seriously.
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Any time. Old farts have something to say, say it well.
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Thanks.
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i think so
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I think I hear it – but I’m too downcast to dance…. I’ll be ok tomorrow…
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just listen when you feel better
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Yes!
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happy you hear it
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I hear you Lou
But you’ve gotta do
The baselines from your head
It has to be neat
But not a repeat
Of something that you’ve read
Don’t worry of the grammar
Don’t worry of the tense
Disengage your ego
Forget the audience
Make sure it’s authentic
Make sure that it’s true
Make sure that you feel it
MAKE SURE IT IS YOU.
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good point. good comment
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I sure do.
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very cool
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Uh…This would be a song about desire to write a song? I’ve played synthesizer, for real, since 1973. I’ve stepped inside my mind and heard shit that’s acid on crack reversed and immersed in a 3D orb and seen music fly out of a piano harp as colorful geometry. So my question is are we reading the desire to write like that feels? The trick to the kick is 60 cycles or down where you can count them, gated, with some smack on the attack and the fading luminosity ooooooommmm. Here’s one. Did you know that churches long ago used the 32 foot or longer oragn pipes to rattle the room and instill fear in parishoners? That a standing subharmonic can cause your bowels to let go and stop your heart? If you desire to write like that? Strong enough to stop people’s hearts and make them shit where they stand? That, my man, is a kick ass desire and may you succeed! No more candy ass.
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haha i was reaching for something like that
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Love this!
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thank you very much
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Loud and clear😍
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good
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I really want ot make some music too…. perfectly said. ❤
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thank you.. your words make noise too, don’t worry
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Haha. Thanks! 🙂
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Oh, hell yes, and may she please put on her party dress. This stuff bounces in my head all day long.
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right on
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Really felt that…
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good to know others get it
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Some feel the rain while others get wet …
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exactly
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